Tuesday, 9 April 2024

Critique: Fall of Radiance (Blake Arthur Peel)

This book series focuses on the ranger Owen and the mage Zara. They live in Tarsynium, a country under the Arc of Radiance that keeps demons out. But demons are starting to get in.

 

*****SPOILERS*****

 

 

There were positives that were simply spectacular.

            Two events were so unfair and so unjust that I had to stop reading for a few days because I was fuming. (The pair were exiled to keep the peace; Owen potentially being executed for ‘abandoning his post’.) To have such a visceral reaction was a great achievement, but for it to change my behaviour? That took real talents on the author’s part.

            I usually dislike reading war scenes being as they can be repetitive. Physical fight scenes also fall victim to this. But each fight/war scene was engaging and not boring. Hats off to the author.

            In the end, everyone knew Owen and Zara were going off to their death. This happens a lot in fiction and it’s accompanied by the characters staying alive by some twist. It’s what’s expected. So when this doesn’t happen with Owen and Zara, when they don’t survive in order to save everyone else, it hits hard. To have both main characters die is bad enough, but to die when you explicitly expect them both to live? That was an unexpected twist that was a stroke of genius.

            Owen and Zara’s interactions are initially frosty. They warm up in a steady, well-managed progression. So whilst not ‘spectacular’, this is another indication of the author’s talent.

 

The mages and rangers have a rivalry and a lack of trust between them. Mages advance learning and society whilst rangers protect the country’s borders. Their roles are neither the same, nor do their roles contradict each other. Thus there seems to be no reason to be rivals or to lack trust. This concept is only touched upon in the first book (and even then only lightly). So between the no reason and the barely there nature, it was so bizarre to include this rivalry.

 

The way the author wrote wasn’t all that great.

Books being in first person sometimes brings advantages over doing so in third person. This series was not one of these instances. Being in the character’s head (rather than just watching them) should bring more insight and information. Yet in this series, all the information the readers got wasn’t deeper than what third person would allow. So being written in first person didn’t add anything to the story.

Later in the series, we get chapters from the perspectives of Elias and Talon. But these are written in third person! From a literary perspective, they were better than the first person perspectives from Owen and Zara. But to have both first and third person perspectives in the same book is utter madness! Sometimes it’s fine (think a frame story, where the frame is third person but then the stories within are in first person because that’s how a person tells a story of themselves to others.) But this certainly wasn’t the case here.

They were written in the present tense! I was honestly baffled by this. I suppose one could argue the present tense makes the reader feel more in the moment, but it’s hard to be in the moment when each verb threw me for being a different tense than expected. Even though there’s nothing wrong with writing in the present tense per se, it definitely negatively impacted my quality of reading.

Often, when the author looks back at a few days, they talk about it having been weeks. The same thing happens with extending weeks to months. The activities that happen don’t match up period of times given to them at a later date.

 

The mages only used fire for their attacks (bar particular exceptions in particular situations).

This got repetitive, especially with Zara. Maybe it was just her signature move? But mage fire was how all the mages fought. Some extra creativity would have been positive from two angles: enjoyment and consistency. As a reader, it would have been more enjoyable to see more creativity.

The consistency element is more important from the perspective of a critique. The reader is reminded often that mages spent a lot of time studying, which means a mage should have a wide variety of knowledge, including attacks. A lack of variety goes in the face of, and is inconsistent with, all that studying.

 

The behaviour was sometimes off.

A few of the female characters had outbursts. They fit with neither the characters nor the situations. They were so out of place that their reasoning can’t be fathomed. (Well, the reasoning for the plot is clear, but as characters are the vectors of the plot then plot points need to fit their characters. Which these outbursts did not.) So this is bad enough. But to give this weird behaviour to the female characters only? Was this just unlucky or is this the result of a negative bias towards women?

In the second book, a Warden decides to put Owen on trial for abandoning his post. Now, she knew he’d just been to a secret meeting of mages. That’s a pretty big deal. Considering Owen’s post is to protect Tarsynium, the mages would’ve only invited him to their meeting if it was about Tarsynium’s meeting, hence going to the meeting fulfils his post and thus cannot be him abandoning his post.

 

Zara learns the language of the wastelanders, the people that live outside the Arc of Radiance. This was problematic.

She complains about the complexities of several bits of grammar. She gives the same exact lecture in her head at least twice. If the lecture doesn’t change in substance (what’s complained about) or situation (who gets complained to), then how the information’s repeated shouldn’t be repeated in the exact same way. It would have been easy enough for the essence of the complaint can be repeated without actually repeating what’s been written already.

Zara says that the wastelander’s language must have diverged from hers. This is a rather large assumption without a shred of evidence. Yes, being next to Tarsynium would imply the people of the wastelands and Tarsynium are from the stock and, as such, so is their language. But many languages of different origins can easily coexist in the same place. Plus it’s been a thousand years since the Arc of Radiance went up: this is plenty of time from migration so these wastelanders (and their language) may be from a different part of the planet.

Finally, let’s consider the possibility that Zara’s language and the wastelanders’ language does originate from a recent common ancestor. Now, languages are always evolving. Yet a thousand years isn’t enough time for diverged languages to have no recognition between them. (Although a bit difficult at first, we can understand English written a thousand years ago.) Within this time, they’d still be some mutual intelligibility (understood by one another). Zara having no recognition of the wastelander’s language conclusively proves they’re not from the same language.

 

This review was a bit different from the ones I usually do.

When I read something, the first time is always for entertainment. I won’t even entertain the concept of reviewing a book on the first time around because it ruins the experience.

This book series, however, had me in a bit of a bind. I had stuff I wanted to say but I didn’t want to read it again. (It was a slog.) So I didn’t note down any incorrect grammar or punctuation. I didn’t note down any of the beautiful descriptions.

Yet clearly this series made an impression on me. Definitely worth my while.

No comments:

Post a Comment